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Suicide - a haiku by ~CursedArchangels:iconCursedArchangels:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern


      I wanted to die,
  Now I can sleep forever.
      I escaped from life.
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Author's Comments

I've just discovered that I'm actually decent at haiku.

I used to be shit at all poetry, especially rhyming and haiku. But I attempted this, and it wasn't half bad!

Was writing haiku, had written twelve, wanted a thirteenth, wanted to write a suicide poem, did, this is the result.


Any critique OTHER than "traditional haiku aren't so literal" is welcome, because I know what traditional haiku are like, and I don't write traditional haiku, I say balls to tradition when it comes to being creative.


Hope you enjoy it anyway!

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:iconruneyue:
*RuneYue Aug 16, 2009, 3:52:53 AM
I...do not know what I like more. The depth, insight and straightforwardness to this haiku or your author's commentary. :+favlove:

--
For who we are can only be deemed by what we think of others.
For what we are can only be read by what we think of life.
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~Beracahvalley Aug 16, 2009, 7:13:50 AM
I sort of like this strangely. Maybe because I still feel that way at times. Mankind somehow cant take much of a reality and sleep is like a little death.

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[Life and memories]
:iconcursedarchangels:
~CursedArchangels Aug 18, 2009, 2:07:30 AM
haha you don't have to be strange to like it.

But - yes. We cannot take too much of reality, we must all withdraw at times. And those who cannot, chose another way to withdraw. Permanently

--
:music:Put the gun in my mouth and pull the trigger,
..._...l..________________, ,
....../ '---_______----______l]
...../_==o_______.:/
.....), ---.(_(__)/
....// (..) ) ,----"
...//____/
..//____/
.//____/
I feel so alive, here.:music:
:iconcursedarchangels:
~CursedArchangels Aug 18, 2009, 2:13:36 AM
or the reason behind writing it - I was bored and decided to write thirteen haiku, then did it.

--
:music:Put the gun in my mouth and pull the trigger,
..._...l..________________, ,
....../ '---_______----______l]
...../_==o_______.:/
.....), ---.(_(__)/
....// (..) ) ,----"
...//____/
..//____/
.//____/
I feel so alive, here.:music:
:iconruneyue:
*RuneYue Aug 18, 2009, 3:19:21 AM
Done very well~

--
For who we are can only be deemed by what we think of others.
For what we are can only be read by what we think of life.
:iconcursedarchangels:
~CursedArchangels Aug 18, 2009, 8:22:03 PM
Thank you

--
:music:Put the gun in my mouth and pull the trigger,
..._...l..________________, ,
....../ '---_______----______l]
...../_==o_______.:/
.....), ---.(_(__)/
....// (..) ) ,----"
...//____/
..//____/
.//____/
I feel so alive, here.:music:
:iconruneyue:
*RuneYue Aug 19, 2009, 8:11:24 AM
Thank you for sharing it with the rest of us. :)

--
For who we are can only be deemed by what we think of others.
For what we are can only be read by what we think of life.
:iconcursedarchangels:
~CursedArchangels Aug 24, 2009, 12:35:55 AM
You're welcome :D

--
:music:Put the gun in my mouth and pull the trigger,
..._...l..________________, ,
....../ '---_______----______l]
...../_==o_______.:/
.....), ---.(_(__)/
....// (..) ) ,----"
...//____/
..//____/
.//____/
I feel so alive, here.:music:
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